Today's Tuesday Teaser introduces my heroine, Giacinta, as my hero, Nick Ryder, first sees her as she enters a tavern in Venice. (Keep in mind that this is 1st draft material, so there may be some clunky sentences. They should get smoothed out in revisions. This is just to give you a taste of the story I'm working on.)
A woman stood in the open doorway. Not
the sort of overly-primped wench with stained cheeks and lips that the harlots
of Venice attempted to seduce men with. A natural elegance radiated from the
crimped coils of her bronze-colored hair, to the delicate blush on the glow of
her faintly golden skin, to the modest embellishments on the gown that draped a
shapely bosom, and the slender, beringed fingers that somewhat tremblingly
clutched the doorjamb. Nick’s gaze followed the flow of her skirts over the
graceful curve of her hips to the tips of the red slippers peeking out from
beneath their folds, before returning to her face. He judged her to be near her
twentieth year.
Her brown eyes, warm and luxuriant as
honey, stared into the tavern, round with dismay, as though she gazed upon some
scene from purgatory. Her blush deepened, perhaps from all the stares of the
men fixed upon her, more than a few of which had gone broadly lecherous. Her
hand left the doorjamb to briefly touch her hair, as if belatedly aware that
she had failed to don a covering veil. Dread flashed in her eyes, so stark Nick
thought she might turn about and flee. To his surprise, a shout half-rose in
his throat to stay her, for he sensed her departure would leave a blast of cold
in his chest.
Then her gaze darted to some point
behind Nick and he saw her spine stiffen. Her expression altered. He had seen
just such a look in men’s eyes on the battlefield: an unflinching resolve to
face the enemy blazing in defiance of the weakness of fear. Her sweetly rounded
chin lifted with all the fortitude of an unflinching warrior.
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