So here is a final sampling of new sentences from my first draft of Lucianna's story. Hmmm. I think it's time to start working on a real title for it now!
Monday: Every
action, every word, every expression that had made her love him, ruined now by
the memory of this day that could never be wiped from her mind and heart
because she would always know he had not wiped it from his.
Tuesday: Sir
Balduin rarely swore in her presence but the muffled word, though indistinct,
bore such a blasphemous hint that it startled her into glancing at him.
Wednesday: He
repeated her name, a warm caress of confidence now on his lips.
Thursday: There
was a time when Lucianna’s rebukes had intimidated Perrin, but he had grown
regrettably impervious to them as his precociousness had coaxed a maternal
affection in her and softened the force, if not the frequency, of her
chastisements.
Friday: Sir
Balduin’s shoulders half-lifted in a shrug. He caught Lucianna’s glare and
swiftly resumed his normal posture.
2 comments:
You sound satisfied with your writing work! That's great.
Some days I'm more satisfied than others, Laura, but I did have fun with the ending of this story. :-)
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